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CUT by ~foxdrum:iconfoxdrum:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark


You look for an escape
but there's nowhere to hide.
You need to get away
from this feeling inside.

The madness around you
has penetrated your soul.
You cry out.  You long for
your times of old.

You need something
to end this misery.
You see the blade.
You need to bleed.

You hold it in your hand.
Just one single blow
can end it all now.
You decide to go.

You feel the sharp slice
accross your vein.
You see the blood
but you don't feel pain.

You find the happiness
that you once loved,
but you can never grasp it
once you've been

CUT
©2004-2009 ~foxdrum
:iconfoxdrum:

Author's Comments

hiya........yeah, I don't cut myself........but I was in a really bad mood a few days ago and decided to write it.......I'm not much of a poet, but I felt like posting it.......*shrugs*

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=cozmictwinkie Feb 29, 2004, 9:59:47 PM
Damn...

I mean...DAMN! Wow sis...this is REALLY good!

I'm...I'm friggin speechless. XD

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~CypherThePennGunner Feb 29, 2004, 11:23:04 PM
YOU BEAUTIFUL BODACIOUS FEMALE YOU!!!

this is....damn. That is all I can say....damn. You are good, and hit home for thousands of cutters out there.

Keep up the good work...I will be watching....
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~the-hyrax-lord Mar 1, 2004, 5:12:16 AM
This reminds me of a poem I wrote several years ago, its very similar in style and content.

...You see the blade.
You need to bleed.

love that bit, has a nice rhythm to it...

If I were in a slightly worse mood I'd go through and suggest how this could b improved, but I'm in a good mood and I don't wanna tick you off...

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~TheDefenderoftheNigh Mar 1, 2004, 1:47:09 PM
'Tis rather good. I like the flow of it. And the rhyme and whatnot. It's like, bluntly obvious, but that's refreshing now and then, seeing as way too many people try to wrap everything up tight in metaphors these days. Nice job.

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Sometimes you have to lose yourself before you can find anything.
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~ScissorStar Mar 1, 2004, 3:13:34 PM
"..you've been

CUT"

AHHH! Oh, geez...! Seems I got a little too into it... :)
But I very much like it :D Keep it up, now, y'hear!?
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~dragon16 Mar 1, 2004, 10:13:35 PM
wow, awesome poem, but i would never cut myself from sadness, although, i have cut myself when i was bored. now i have an X shaped scar on my arm.

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dragon16

Current clubs i'm in:
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~ImmortalSlayer Mar 8, 2004, 8:35:16 AM
Beautiful poem. Lovely imagery.

:+fav:

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~Obey-Me

I used to stand for something
Now I'm on my hands and knees
Traded my god in for this one
And he signs his name with a capital G
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~ImmortalSlayer Mar 9, 2004, 8:08:40 AM
any time!

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~Obey-Me

I used to stand for something
Now I'm on my hands and knees
Traded my god in for this one
And he signs his name with a capital G
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